Sean wrote:
>
>
> Hi everybody.
>
> Busy semester, as per usual. Last of 'em too. I've got a really BS
> class about "The World's Music" with is sort of a watered-down
> ethnomusicology class that I've been required to take, even though
> for what it applies to helping little kids become musicians, I
> could've just spent a couple evenings in the local public library.
>
> Any case, there's an essay requirement about examining, from sort
> of an ethnomusicology perspective, a music that we are already
> familiar with, because apparently... a good essay should /not/ be
> ..a.. research paper? (And I thought I was getting an education.)
>
> So I'm posting the prompt for the essay, followed by what I wrote,
> which is 3 times as long as the meager 1000 words he was asking for
> and not expecting to get from anyone. I'm asking that you correct
> where I may be off base, saying things about prog that sound right
> but aren't, or where I over simplified, entirely missed the point,
> or whatnot. Even though the professor expects /shit/ for an essay
> I'm going to give him a damned good one in any case, because
> /that's how I roll./
>
> PS. Oh damn, I forgot a few content areas, but I can correct that
> later. So now it will be 4 times as long...
Needs a lot of tightening. Some ruthless red-penning to make it
"cogent & pithy" as Professor Mel Amov used to say. Three words used
where the right / more meaningful one could be, etc. Good luck.
--
Cheers, SDM -- a 21st Century Schizoid Man
Systems Theory project website: www.systemstheory.net
find us on MySpace, GarageBand, Reverb Nation, Last FM, CDBaby
free MP3s of Systems Theory, Mike Dickson & Greg Amov music at
www.mikedickson.org.uk